I was represented by the Claire Gerus Literary Agency and we recently parted ways amicably. I see that you are looking for YA sci-fi and thrillers, and I’d like to show you MANAS, complete with series potential at 75,000 words.
Zellie, a prodigy spy with pink hair and a penchant for knitting, is sent to
In addition to years of professional editing, I have extensive experience writing professionally in both traditional print and online media.
Attached below are the first 250 words, as per your request. I would be honored if you would consider representing MANAS.
Thank you for your consideration and attention,
A.P.
MANAS
“Any time you’re ready,” I whispered into my headset. “I’m a go on your signal. Of course, I’m comfortable where I am, too, if you’d like to continue taking your sweet-a** time.”
Fifty stories below me, Trey grunted. “Keep your pants on, little one. You’ll get your shot. This isn’t as easy as it looks.”
Through our camtacts--nanobot technology built into contacts--I watched Trey lunge again at the metal backdoor in the subway station. My viewer, attached to my wrist, showed four quadrants with different locations. Each contained a direct link to the rest of my team--Trey, Jace, Marienne and Emerson. Altogether, a deadly quintet.
The reception on Trey’s quadrant fuzzed as he made contact with the rusted metal. “Have you even broken a sweat?” he asked, most of his attention focused on busting down the back door into the building to use as our escape route.
“I am a sniper, not a strong-armed brute,” I said sweetly. I was teasing him, but part of me wanted action, which I wouldn’t get unless something went wrong. Such is the role of the mission lead--boring.
“Never send a woman to do a man’s job.”
“Will you two shut up? You’re interfering with my feed,” Marienne snapped. Our resident hacker, she sat in the cafĂ© across the street. I watched her orange fingernails click across the laptop’s keyboard. “OK, I’m waiting at the gates of the system mainframe. Your word and I’ll get the door.”
10 comments:
I love how you build such personality into your characters right off that bat. That's what makes me want to read more.
And I really like the query. Its short, succinct, giving me enough information, but asking a few questions that I want to read in the book.
I'm really impressed with how concise your query is. Great job there :D And I love the opening as well. Lots of personality mixed in with the intriguing set up.
I am super impressed with the whole project.
Your query is so concise and I could have repeated it to anyone - just what you want!
OBSESSED with the MC, her voice, and the whole team (even though I only know two of them!)
Sign me up for an ARC. :)
Agreed with above commenters - the sassy back-and-forth between your characters was a great way to start.
Your query and sample pages are very good. It's easy to see why you were agented. Good luck with this.
I like it a lot, too - great job. One thing (based on the YA label) - I have no idea how a group of teenagers end up being international spies - if she's 19 or 20, maybe you could work that in (or maybe that's just me since I'm not super familiar with the scifi/thriller genre).
Thanks for sharing and good luck!
erica
"Zellie, a prodigy spy with pink hair and a penchant for knitting,"
Wow. 12 words and I'm already in love with this character.
Your query is great, and your first page has tension and voice. Awesome work!
I too thought you did a great job writing a short teaser of a query although I have to admit I had to reread the first couple of sentences in the 2nd paraphraph over again to really get what was going on. Maybe I'm just slow- haha.
The writing was good too- I got a great sense of your characters and the set-up.
I was also confused about teenage spies though.
A.P. - Love this! I'm taken with Zellie and Oliver right away, and am always looking for a good sci-fi thriller. The international setting is also a good choice. My only comment on the query is that I wish I knew what Project Manas was. What's the threat? Otherwise, I think it's great.
Oh, wow -- so many nice comments!
Agent: You're totally right -- I never do mention it! Project Manas is a genetic experiment aimed at creating the perfect soldier, and guess who it was tested on first. :)
Thank you all – I really appreciate it. I'm writing a scary ghost story at the moment, and I really needed the encouragement!
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