Title: DEATH AND THE GLASSMAKER’S DAUGHTER
Genre: YA historical fantasy
Word count: 67,000
Query:
As the son of
Death, Moriarty was raised believing in the beauty of ending a life. Then
he takes over his father’s work and finds that ripping souls from mortal bodies
is nothing like the stories that populated his childhood. It’s violent and
bloody, and with imperialism,
labor strikes, and people's revolutions leaving corpses around the world,
Moriarty can’t find anything to love in his new work.
Until
he meets his next victim: Rocsanne Vetrario, the bold, bohemian daughter of
Venetian glaziers. Instead of ending her life, Moriarty accidentally saves it,
thus kindling a friendship that tumbles into love amid the canals of 1890s Venice.
But
their summer together shatters when Moriarty learns that Rocsanne’s stepmother
Lavinia is on a crusade to recover the lost secrets of Venetian glass and its
power to bestow immortality. When Lavinia discovers her daughter’s romance with
the soul collector himself, she threatens to kill Rocsanne unless Moriarty
helps her retrieve a piece of the legendary glass.
Surrendering
the glass will give Lavinia control over Moriarty and his work, but if Rocsanne
dies, he’ll lose her forever to the
afterlife. With Lavinia holding Rocsanne hostage on the cemetery island of San
Michele, Moriarty has to choose between his own freedom and the only girl who
ever loved Death.
First page:
The first thing he noticed was the rain.
The first thing he noticed was the rain.
Moriarty
had never felt rain before. It didn’t rain in the Greylands, nor did the
brushed-black sky wink with tiny pinpricks of light, like jewels floating in a
glassy lake. Even the sky itself was new--there was no sky in the Greylands.
But
the rain was the first and most marvelous thing--the way it felt against his
skin, each drop unexpected and ephemeral.
Yes, Moriarty decided. I like the
rain best.
Hector
hadn’t told him about the rain. But Hector had hardly told him anything about
the humans, or mortality, or the work he’d be doing, the work that used to be
Hector’s. Though they had never discussed it, Moriarty had always known that
someday, Hector would grow weary of soul collecting, and the work would pass to
him. Father to son.
He
had not expected it to be this sudden.
Moriarty
looked down at his hands. In each, he clutched one of Hector’s two parting
gifts, the only tools of his trade. The first was a heavy brass compass with a
blank face and a black hand, shivering but steady as it pointed him ahead into
the night. Pressing the face once had brought him to mortality, and twice would
take him back to the Greylands when he was finished. The
second was a colorless glass amulet streaked with red, which Hector had
promised would keep him invisible to all humans but the one he sought.
This is gorgeous, just GORGEOUS. I love the setting, I love your writing... well done! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteWow! There's some absolutely beautiful writing here! Your first line drew me right in. I don't read a lot of historical fantasy, but this premise is so unique -- it's definitely something I'd pick up! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like a book I just wouldn't be able to put down if I got my hands on it. Your voice and your query are superb! Love it! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteYou had me at "friendship that tumbles into love amid the canals of 1890s Venice." Lovely! And your opening page fulfills that promise. Beautiful work. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThere's such beautiful writing here! It just drew me in immediately. And oh, the setting in 1890s Venice! This sounds enthralling. Best of luck in the contest, and go Team Krista!
ReplyDeleteYou paint such vivid pictures with your words - "It didn’t rain in the Greylands, nor did the brushed-black sky wink with tiny pinpricks of light, like jewels floating in a glassy lake." It's delicious, really! Such a fantastic concept - your query is tight and your voice in your first 250 are outstanding. Good luck!!
ReplyDeleteYou paint gorgeous descriptions with your words!
ReplyDeleteI'm gonna need to pre-order this one now. Thanks. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat concept - this is exactly the kind of book I would pick up immediately. Can't wait to see it on the shelf someday soon - good luck!
ReplyDeleteThis is one of the entries that I NEED to read. All the way through, it is just...gold.
ReplyDeleteVery excited to see this progress in bookworld :)
BEAUTIFUL writing. I can't wait to read the rest of this!
ReplyDeleteI have been looking for a big, lush historical novel, and I really like the Venetian glass aspect of this. The Moriarty-as-son-of-Death might make it a bit trickier, but I'd love to take a look and see how it plays out. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThis has a fabulous voice and tone--I'm completely hooked in by the opener, and love the story concept. I'd love to read on further!
ReplyDeleteI'm excited to read this, and glad to request it!
ReplyDelete-Mollie
What a compelling premise. Would love to read on!
ReplyDeleteI'd love to see this!
ReplyDeleteExcellent writing. Would like to read more.
ReplyDeleteI'd love to see this!
ReplyDeleteYes for Team Pippin too!
ReplyDeleteYes for me. Thanks.
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