Wednesday, August 20, 2014

An Agent's Inbox #2

Dear Agent,

When eleven-year-old Avery Mann is tricked into freeing a murderous raven from Wonderland, he discovers the creatures of our dreams and nightmares really exist. Unfortunately, some of these beings, like the Wicked Witch of the Midwest, want to transform our world into a twisted fantasyland. 

Protecting reality from the villains who want to tear it apart was not on Avery’s summer-to-do list. However, it is his fault that the world is about to end. So Avery sets out to throw a flying monkey wrench into the bad guy's plans. Turns out the first step is freeing the Wicked Witch of the East from Dante's Inferno. If he succeeds, he’ll protect his family and friends from a nightmarish future and get to finish reading his Ultimate Spider-Man collection. But a lot can go wrong in the eighth circle of hell.

THE UNBELIEVABLE MISADVENTURES OF AVERY MANN is a 70,000-word, middle-grade contemporary fantasy.

I am an award-winning writer in the role-playing game industry and an active member of the SCBWI. I also have a master’s degree in Library and Information Science with a focus on children services and literature. 

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
J.M.


THE UNBELIEVABLE MISADVENTURES OF AVERY MANN

Number one on my summer-to-do list was: AVOID TROUBLE.

This applied especially to my arch-nemesis from school, Maxine "The Wild Thing" Lopez, and my older brothers (a.k.a. the Sinister Six).

Of course, when bad luck follows you around like a herd of black cats busting mirrors and spilling salt shakers, this becomes easier said than done, which was why I was laying low in the middle of Kensington Park. Its walled garden might not be as remote as Superman's Fortress of Solitude or as concealed as the Batcave, but it made the perfect sanctuary. It also smelled a lot better than the bushes behind Ms. Crabtree's compost heap--my previous hideout--which required the use of nose-plugs.

Best of all, neither Maxine nor my brothers would be caught dead in a flower garden, which meant I could read comics and practice magic tricks in peace.

A church bell rang in the distance.  

Noon on the first day of summer vacation and not a sign of trouble. Not the Sinister Six. Not Maxine. Not--

SWAT!

A piece of paper flew into my face.

"Gah!" I yanked it off me, ready to rip the thing into subatomic particles, but the word, "Magic" caught my eye and I shoved the flapping flyer against the ground.

Madame Magpie's Magic Shoppe Grand Opening!
Incredible magic tricks, strange curiosities, and much more!
All customers get a free token for our fortune-telling machine. One lucky winner will receive a $100 gift card!

An Agent's Inbox #1

Dear Agent,

I am so excited to be taking part in AN AGENT'S INBOX. I appreciate you taking time to give feedback and select the winners and prizes.

Sixteen-year-old Annie’s best friend is missing, and fingers may be pointing at her. Somehow classic good-girl Michelle disappeared without warning, launching Annie into a world of interrogations and secrets where everyone thinks she holds the key. Michelle's sketchy dad doesn’t help any as he starts painting a different picture of who his daughter was compared to the friend Annie thought she knew. Determined to uncover the murky truth surrounding Michelle’s missing person’s case, Annie finds it harder and harder to ignore the guilt welling up inside of her.

But when Michelle's remains are found three years later, everyone starts finding closure, everyone except a 19-year-old Annie who is interrogated as a suspect in the new homicide case. Just when Annie is losing hope of ever discovering the truth, she’s approached by Michelle’s younger sister, who is now at the age where Michelle started having trouble with dear old, creeptastic dad. She has her own suspicions as to what happened to her half sister--and wants Annie’s help to prove it.

Complete at 86,000 words, MISSING is a contemporary young adult loosely based on my personal experience when I launched my own private investigation after my high school best friend's unusual disappearance, and how I learned to cope after her remains were found.

I am a published freelance writer and blogger with a creative writing degree from Appalachian State University, a former editor with REALITY Check Girl magazine, and I currently freelance weekly for Engagement 101 magazine's website.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
E.H.D.


MISSING

I should’ve just answered the phone. Friday seemed so long ago in this Sunday night haze. Staring at the detectives sitting on the couch across from me, I felt like a frightened ten-year-old.

They said Michelle was missing.

It was like an odd interrogation scene--the detectives in front of me, my parents behind me at the dining room table.

Did they think I was guilty?

“So, Miss Clark, tell us about Michelle,” Detective Stone said. “What was she like?”

Detective Stone was probably in his thirties or forties. A goatee outlined his square chin paired with a sort of buzz cut, and a leather jacket and jeans. It seemed like he was trying to be cool, and it wasn’t really working for him.

“I still don’t understand,” I said.

His partner, Detective Royal, leaned forward on the couch a little bit like a psychologist prepping to tell me that I was crazy. His face was kind, unlike his partner, who seemed to have a face etched in cement. His blue eyes contrasted with his coffee colored hair.

“Michelle’s father has been unable to reach or locate her since last night. Apparently she told her boyfriend she’d call him, but never did.” Detective Royal ran his hand through his hair as he spoke. “When he didn’t hear from her this morning, he contacted her father, who was staying at someone else’s house.”

“Whose house?” I interrupted him.

“A woman named Kathy,” Detective Stone responded.

“His ex-girlfriend?”

“Mr. Lance said they recently reconciled.”

Monday, August 18, 2014

Now Accepting Entries

UPDATE: I've now responded to every e-mail sent before 2:00 p.m. EDT (or 11:00 a.m. PDT). I have a few more to go, but I just wanted to let everyone know that this month's round is FULL.

For transparency's sake, here's the list of lottery winners (with original lottery numbers as opposed to post numbers):


4
31
1
7
19
18
6
9
32
20
23
27
28
2
13
29
22
16
10
17
26
34
25
24
5
33
11
30
15
12

The entries will go up Wednesday morning, so I'll see you then!

I'm now accepting entries for August's round of "An Agent's Inbox"! Here's a quick refresher:

The Rules

1. To enter, your manuscript must meet two conditions: First, it must be COMPLETE, POLISHED, AND READY TO QUERY, and second, it must be in one of the genres The Agent represents (which are listed at the bottom of this post).

2. IF YOU PARTICIPATED IN FEBRUARY’S ROUND OF “AN AGENT’S INBOX,” please DO NOT participate in this one UNLESS YOU HAVE A NEW MANUSCRIPT that meets the criteria listed above. I have a pretty good memory, and I will disqualify previous entries. If the entry slots don’t fill up by Tuesday, August 19, I may allow previous participants to enter, but I’m not going to make that decision right now.

3. All entries must include A QUERY and THE FIRST 250 WORDS of your manuscript. You must paste these items IN THE BODY OF YOUR E-MAIL; otherwise, I'll disqualify it.

4. THE ENTRY WINDOW OPENS AT 1:00 P.M. EDT (OR 10:00 A.M. PDT). Once the entry window opens, I'll accept the first 20 30 entries. I won't accept any entries sent before the entry window opens or after the first 20 30 slots fill up.

5. If your entry makes it in, I'll send you a confirmation e-mail with a post number. If your entry doesn't make it in, I'll still send you an e-mail, but it won't have a post number.

6. If your entry makes it in, YOU MUST COMMENT ON AT LEAST 3 OTHER ENTRIES.

The Prizes The Agent will select both the winners and the prizes. The Agent might pick 20 30 winners, or he or she might only pick one. The Agent might offer full requests, or he or she might only ask to see another page. It all depends on how good the entries are.

Please keep in mind that THIS CONTEST ISN'T FOR THE FAINT OF HEART. I've encouraged The Agent to treat the entries exactly as he or she would a normal batch of queries. Essentially, The Agent will be answering the question, "How much of the entry did you read, and if you didn't read it all, why did you stop?" I think this process will be instructive for all of us, but if you enter, you need to be prepared to hear exactly what The Agent thinks of your query and first page.

The Genres

MG fiction (all genres)
YA fiction (all genres)
NA fiction (all genres except erotica)

To enter, please send an e-mail with YOUR QUERY and THE FIRST 250 WORDS of your manuscript to kvandolzer(at)gmail(dot)com. And please, please, please remember to PASTE THESE ITEMS IN THE BODY OF THE E-MAIL.

Friday, August 15, 2014

"An Agent's Inbox" Contest Alert

THIS IS NOT A CALL FOR ENTRIES! I’M JUST GIVING YOU A HEADS-UP. THE CONTEST OPENS NEXT MONDAY, AUGUST 18.

It’s been a while since we did one of these, so here’s a quick refresher. “An Agent's Inbox” is exactly what it sounds like--next week, I'm turning the blog into an agent's inbox, a public one. We'll get to see 20 30 queries along with their first pages, and we'll get to hear what a bona fide agent thinks of each one.

The queries and first pages will be yours, of course. I'll accept your entries this Monday, August 18, and then I'll post them next Wednesday, August 20. The entrants and anyone else who wishes to review them may comment until the following Monday or Tuesday, August 25 or 26, when I'll announce the winners. Those winners will be chosen by The Agent, who will remain nameless for now, and he or she will offer whatever prizes he or she wishes.

The Rules

1. To enter, your manuscript must meet two conditions: First, it must be COMPLETE, POLISHED, AND READY TO QUERY, and second, it must be in one of the genres The Agent represents (which are listed at the bottom of this post).

2. IF YOU PARTICIPATED IN FEBRUARY’S ROUND OF “AN AGENT’S INBOX,” please DO NOT participate in this one UNLESS YOU HAVE A NEW MANUSCRIPT that meets the criteria listed above. I have a pretty good memory, and I will disqualify previous entries. If the entry slots don’t fill up by Tuesday, August 19, I may allow previous participants to enter, but I’m not going to make that decision right now.

3. All entries must include A QUERY and THE FIRST 250 WORDS of your manuscript. You must paste these items IN THE BODY OF YOUR E-MAIL; otherwise, I'll disqualify it.

4. THE ENTRY WINDOW OPENS AT 1:00 P.M. EDT (OR 10:00 A.M. PDT). Once the entry window opens, I'll accept the first 20 30 entries. I won't accept any entries sent before the entry window opens or after the first 20 30 slots fill up.

5. If your entry makes it in, I'll send you a confirmation e-mail with a post number. If your entry doesn't make it in, I'll still send you an e-mail, but it won't have a post number.

6. If your entry makes it in, YOU MUST COMMENT ON AT LEAST 3 OTHER ENTRIES.

The Prizes The Agent will select both the winners and the prizes. The Agent might pick 20 30 winners, or he or she might only pick one. The Agent might offer full requests, or he or she might only ask to see another page. It all depends on how good the entries are.

Please keep in mind that THIS CONTEST ISN'T FOR THE FAINT OF HEART. I've encouraged The Agent to treat the entries exactly as he or she would a normal batch of queries. Essentially, The Agent will be answering the question, "How much of the entry did you read, and if you didn't read it all, why did you stop?" I think this process will be instructive for all of us, but if you enter, you need to be prepared to hear exactly what The Agent thinks of your query and first page.

So get those queries and first pages polished up, then meet us back here on Monday, August 18, at 1:00 p.m. EDT! At that time, you may send your entries to kvandolzer(at)gmail(dot)com. Looking forward to it!

The Genres

MG fiction (all genres)
YA fiction (all genres)
NA fiction (all genres except erotica)

If you have any questions, feel free to leave them in the comments below!

Wednesday, August 13, 2014

#AvailableAlmostEverywhere

As I've been reading about Amazon's latest volley, one refrain keeps scrolling through my brain: "That could be me next year, that could be me next year, that could be me next year." When giants clash, it's usually the little guys who get trampled, and in this industry, there is no one littler than the debut novelist.

Douglas Preston and Stephen Colbert are going to be just fine. They're well-established and can easily reach tens of thousands--if not millions--of readers. But when you're a debut, you don't have a following yet. Except for your parents and your great-aunt Lillian (and maybe a few online friends), no one is going to seek your book out, so if the largest retailer in the land pulls the plug, where does that leave you?

In need of a little help.

In that spirit, I'm spotlighting OneFourKidLit members and Fearless Fifteeners today whose books are available almost everywhere (or soon-to-be available almost everywhere). I haven't read any of these books, so I don't know anything about them (other than what I gleaned on Goodreads), but if anyone deserves a blind shout-out, they do.

SALT & STORM by Kendall Kulper
(available on September 23, 2014)


A sweeping historical romance about a witch who foresees her own murder--and the one boy who can help change her future.

Sixteen-year-old Avery Roe wants only to take her rightful place as the witch of Prince Island, making the charms that keep the island's whalers safe at sea, but her mother has forced her into a magic-free world of proper manners and respectability. When Avery dreams she's to be murdered, she knows time is running out to unlock her magic and save herself.

Avery finds an unexpected ally in a tattooed harpoon boy named Tane--a sailor with magic of his own, who moves Avery in ways she never expected. Becoming a witch might stop her murder and save her island from ruin, but Avery discovers her magic requires a sacrifice she never prepared for.




ILLUSIVE by Emily Lloyd-Jones
(available now!)

The X-Men meets Ocean's Eleven in this edge-of-your-seat sci-fi adventure about a band of "super" criminals.

When the MK virus swept across the planet, a vaccine was created to stop the epidemic, but it came with some unexpected side effects. A small percentage of the population developed superhero-like powers. Seventeen-year-old Ciere Giba has the handy ability to change her appearance at will. She's what's known as an illusionist...She's also a thief.

After a robbery goes awry, Ciere must team up with a group of fellow super-powered criminals on another job that most would consider too reckless. The formula for the vaccine that gave them their abilities was supposedly destroyed years ago. But what if it wasn't?

The lines between good and bad, us and them, and freedom and entrapment are blurred as Ciere and the rest of her crew become embroiled in a deadly race against the government that could cost them their lives.



In the interest of full disclosure, you can still buy ILLUSIVE at Amazon, but without the regular discounts.

THE WITCH HUNTER by Virginia Boecker
(available on June 1, 2015)

The Witch Hunter is set in an alternative 16th-century London. In the story, pitched as Shadow and Bone meets The Tudors, the only girl in the king's elite group of witch hunters is framed for being a witch herself, finding freedom at the hands of the world's most wanted wizard.


THE WITCH HUNTER isn't available for pre-order anywhere (yet), but if these shenanigans continue, it will get caught up in the same net, no doubt. So keep an eye out for fellow Fearless Fifteener Virginia Boecker's THE WITCH HUNTER!

Which of your favorite books have been caught up in this madness? Feel free to give them a shout-out in the comments! (They don't necessarily have to be debuts, but if they are, bonus points!)

Friday, August 8, 2014

Agent-Author Chat: Mackenzie Brady and Catherine Lo

I’m thrilled to welcome Mackenzie Brady of New Leaf Literary & Media and Catherine Lo to the blog for this latest installment of “Agent-Author Chat.” In Ms. Lo’s case, it’s something of a homecoming, since she and THIS IS HOW IT ENDS participated in “The Writer’s Voice” back in 2013. I’m happy to report that in the last year and a half, Ms. Lo signed with Ms. Brady and Ms. Brady sold THIS IS HOW IT ENDS to Houghton Mifflin Harcourt. The book will be released in 2016, but in the meantime, pull up a beanbag and check out the interview.

As always, Ms. Lo’s query and responses will appear in orange, Ms. Brady’s in blue. Enjoy!

Ms. Lo’s Query I have been waiting anxiously for you to re-open to queries after reading your #MSWL for novels that challenge pre-conceived notions and finding your motto LIVE, WORK, CREATE. I identify with much of what you post on your Tumblr account, and I hope you are intrigued by my novel THIS IS HOW IT ENDS. In this book, I aim to challenge people's assumptions about the topic of suicide:

The girl in Dr. Blumenthal’s office is broken.

She wasn’t always broken, of course. Just over a year ago she was a hopeful ninth grade student looking forward to four years of adventure with her new best friend. But that was Before.

Before her best friend committed suicide. Before she found the diaries. Before her whole understanding of the past became a confused and jumbled mess.

Unable to articulate all that has happened, the girl offers up a leather-bound journal as evidence. The journal contains a series of diary entries written by two girls, Jessie and Annie. Their words and memories have been woven together to tell the story of a tumultuous year--a year of betrayals, boys and bullying.

One of the girls will not survive the year. The other will become the wounded girl in the doctor’s office. Only the journal will reveal which girl is which.

Complete at 71,000 words, THIS IS HOW IT ENDS is a Contemporary YA novel inspired by my twelve years working with at-risk teenagers as a teacher in a behavior support program.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

KV: Ms. Lo, how did you first come up with the idea for THIS IS HOW IT ENDS? 

CL: Thank you so much for hosting us on your Author-Agent Chat. 

The idea for THIS IS HOW IT ENDS…this is actually kind of interesting, because the idea has changed so much over this last year.

Initially, the story was inspired by the aftermath of a tragedy that happened at the school where I teach. In my role, I gave support to grief counselors, and worked closely with young people trying to process through their grief over the loss of two students. Being a witness to so much pain and emotion, I had to channel it somehow, and it came out in my writing. I initially envisioned THIS IS HOW IT ENDS as the story of two girls--one who would ultimately commit suicide, and one who would be struggling to come to terms with her role in that loss.

As I wrote, though, the story became more and more about something else. What leapt off the page was the story of the friendship between the girls, Jessie and Annie. They have a very complex relationship--one that’s complicated by the baggage they both bring. Both girls need something from the other, and both struggle with the intensity of feeling that goes into their friendship, and how volatile that friendship becomes. 

KV: Tell us a little bit about your query-writing process. Did you work on it here and there as you were writing the manuscript, or before, or after? How many times did you revise it? And how did you decide what order to put things in?

CL: While writing the manuscript, I spent a lot of my downtime reading and researching about the query writing process. I didn’t actually write the query until after the manuscript was done (or, at least the draft I considered “done” back then), but I kept it in the back of my head and puzzled over it a great deal.

I revised my query so many times, it was ridiculous! I think every agent I queried got a completely different summary of the manuscript. In May 2013, I participated in The Writer’s Voice contest (go Team Krista!), and the help you gave me refining my query at that time was invaluable.

KV: It helped that we were working with great source material to begin with:)

What was the hardest thing about writing your query? What was the easiest?

CL: One of the difficulties I had was trying to get out the idea that the story is told in alternating viewpoints. It was difficult to work in everything I wanted to say without it sounding disjointed and confusing.

The easiest…I don’t know if there was an easiest! Query writing was difficult, though looking back, I did enjoy it. I put a lot of thought into who I would query, and I researched each agent before querying them. The part I enjoyed the most was personalizing each query I sent. I wanted the agents to know the reason why I was querying them in particular.

KV: Ms. Brady, when you first read Ms. Lo’s query, what caught your attention?

MB: This is going to sound horrible, but I've always had a soft spot for suicide stories. I think it's because my high school survived half a dozen suicides in three years, as did many neighboring districts, so it was very much a part of my high school experience. So, I think I initially reacted to the subject matter Cathy outlined in her query. I also remember particularly liking the suspense element of not knowing which girl would survive the year. 

KV: Obviously, the manuscript met--or exceeded--your expectations. What did you love about THIS IS HOW IT ENDS?

MB: I loved (and still love) the raw, emotional power of THIS IS HOW IT ENDS. While the structure and plot have changed over time, the heart of it--Annie and Jessie's complicated friendship--has always remained strong. I connected with both girls equally and instantly, so in moments of conflict I felt incredibly torn between cuddling and killing them both. It is a deliciously frustrating read, as many good stories are!

KV: How quickly did you read Ms. Lo's manuscript? Is that pretty typical of your response times on requested material, or do those vary?

MB: I can't remember exactly how long it took me to begin reading the manuscript after Cathy queried me, but I know that once I did crack open those pages, I finished the whole manuscript in less than forty-eight hours. Once I started I couldn't stop. I had two interns reading it alongside me and we kept shouting across the office what page we were on and how much we loved it. 

In general, I try to get to a manuscript within a week or two of requesting it. Holidays and vacations can slow things down, of course, but I try to be cognizant of everyone's time. If I am enjoying something, though, I can usually churn through it in a few days. 

KV: Ms. Lo, what tips do you have for fellow writers as they work on their queries?

CL: I remember how excited I was to start querying, and I know how tempting it is to rush through the query writing stage and press Send. The query letter is so important, though. It’s your one shot to grab the attention of an agent and get them excited about your book. My advice is: don’t rush. Take your time, get lots of feedback, and do your research. There are many sites that feature “queries that worked”--read some of those and find out what agents are looking for. I also stalked Janet Reid’s Query Shark site and picked up as many pointers as I could there.

KV: Same question to you, Ms. Brady. What query-writing suggestions do you have?

MB: Do your research. There are so many excellent resources online that break down the aspects of compelling query letters that you'd be silly not to spend some time familiarizing yourself with what works.

Also, read a lot of jacket copy. The best query letters read like the backs of published books--they give you a full sense of the story but also leave you wanting more. 

KV: Any last words of advice or encouragement you’d like to share with us?

CL: Keep at it! Don’t give up. I can’t tell you how many rejections I weathered before I got my “Yes!” Take each one as a learning experience and use it to grow and improve. Take any little bits of feedback you’re given, and put them to good use. You will grow as a writer through the querying process if you keep an open mind and keep learning. Every rejection is a learning opportunity.

MB: Finding an agent is like dating--there are a lot of potential partners out there, but you most likely could only spend your life with a small percentage of them. Take your time and make sure you find one you can trust and rely on. 

Excellent advice, ladies. Thank you for these answers. I was somewhat aware of this excitement as it unfolded, but it’s nice to hear whole story. I can’t wait to get my hands on a copy of THIS IS HOW IT ENDS!

Thursday, August 7, 2014

What Channel Surfing Has Taught Me About Writing

I'm not a channel surfer--if there's a show I want to watch, I watch it--but Honey Bear is, and I've started to notice a pattern. Sometimes he stops because he knows the show, but sometimes he stops because the scene simply refuses to be ignored. The conflict is easy to grab hold of, and it's interesting enough that he wants to see what happens. Heck, I want to see what happens, and I'm not usually paying attention.

In other words, the best scenes are the ones that don't require you to know what's going on, that don't rely on twists or inside jokes, that tell an intriguing story on their own. They have a beginning, middle, and end, and the stakes are readily apparent. Plot is how each scene relates to the ones before and after it, but taken out of context, each scene should still tell its own story. If readers flipped through your manuscript and landed on a random page, would that page hold their attention and make them want to read the rest? Would they be immediately invested in the characters and whatever problem they were facing? Would they be able to tell what was going on?

It's a simple lesson, but I do think it's worth mentioning. Awesome books are really just collections of awesome scenes.

Friday, July 25, 2014

Who Won ALL FOUR STARS?

If your name is Kiriojo Karen lee Hallam, you did!

Congratulations, Karen! Please e-mail me at kvandolzer(at)gmail(dot)com with your mailing address so I can get your signed copy in the mail.