tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post1770532867119893196..comments2024-02-27T03:36:20.256-07:00Comments on Krista Van Dolzer: An Agent's Inbox #14Krista Van Dolzerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08830193414560232842noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post-89960575252501270432013-11-11T09:28:31.512-07:002013-11-11T09:28:31.512-07:00So, as I'm sure you've heard, paranormal i...So, as I'm sure you've heard, paranormal is really hard to sell. There are a few familiar tropes here, including "half-demon teen" the "boyfriend in a car accident" and being able to see someone's death before it happens. You'll have to fight against these, unfortunately, in trying to place this one.<br /><br />That said, what draws me to this project is 1) the writing is strong and the voice feels fresh and 2) there seems to be a light touch here, a bit of humor and irony in what might otherwise be a dreary or self-serious paranormal adventure. The humor helps this story stand out in a crowded market. <br /><br />And I love that title.<br /><br />-JJohnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03468129746536121591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post-5164858504669486522013-11-10T11:16:18.500-07:002013-11-10T11:16:18.500-07:00I love the subtle humor in the first 250. The voic...I love the subtle humor in the first 250. The voice is great and makes me want to read more about Belinda.<br /><br />Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post-18318541796595386772013-11-07T15:54:47.310-07:002013-11-07T15:54:47.310-07:00I am intrigued by this concept and like the 250 sa...I am intrigued by this concept and like the 250 sample. I do thing the first paragraph/lines could be a little stronger but overall great sense of setting!Reveriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15894728359837563216noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post-38590934373532514982013-11-06T19:31:38.011-07:002013-11-06T19:31:38.011-07:00I LOVE this. Unfortunately, "normal kid who f...I LOVE this. Unfortunately, "normal kid who finds out they're supernatural" is a hard plot line (even if its super unique)because its been done a lot. That alone might make this a hard one. Of course, I'm not an agent so maybe I'm over thinking it. Plus, there's nothing you can do about that. I think this is a great concept, honestly would totally read it. (Also, read School For Good And Evil, it's an upper MG book but has some similarities and might be another comp title for you.)<br /><br />I hope I'm wrong about it being a hard sell because I'd love to see this published. Good luck!Stacey Trombleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093836904596108872noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post-37503007869892222522013-11-06T12:08:33.058-07:002013-11-06T12:08:33.058-07:00There were hints of humor that intrigued me in you...There were hints of humor that intrigued me in your query and first 250. That made me want to read more of Belinda's voice ("We are a sea of highlighter orange.") Watch for consistent verb tense in your query.Author Amokhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13636391982938592789noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4250988928163509961.post-14137463701794981292013-11-06T11:30:09.598-07:002013-11-06T11:30:09.598-07:00I love the concept of a succubus novel. I've n...I love the concept of a succubus novel. I've never read one before. Quite interesting. I love the imagery you have in your 250 word excerpt. Is this going to be omniscient in anyway?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11040272244939961334noreply@blogger.com